Death Is My Bff

As someone who read this Wattpad story many years ago, at night, under my blanket to hide the light(probably the reason why I wear prescription lenses now), I'm really happy to see this story published.

But, my taste has changed a bit since then. I found the dialog very cheesy and so different in tone from the rest of the story. The whole situation with her best friend frustrated me to no end. I really hated that part. I found that I had a bit of a hard time separating Death from David and as a result when Faith and Death started getting a bit heated at the end, I felt like it was very sudden since we spent the whole first part of the book setting up a romance with another character that behaved totally different to Death. I really liked the worldbuilding but I just felt like a lot of the plot points felt very sudden instead of having any buildup to them.
I'll probably still try the next book hoping to see some improvements in writing.