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This paragraph is a good example of why I couldn't finish this book:

“I'm not sure I believe in ghosts, but I swear we won't do anything to disturb any spirits that might be resting there.” I put down the camera she'd handed me and shook my head as I opened the van closet and pulled out the rest of my field gear. I always keep a few pairs of thick denim jeans on hand, the kind with steel fibers woven into the fabric. ‘Be prepared' isn't just the Boy Scouts' marching song anymore. “Zombies are enough. I don't need to add poltergeists to the ranks of ‘things that want to kill me.'“

The sentence about being prepared - why is it there? It adds absolutely nothing to the paragraph and completely disrupts the flow of the story. I take that back, it does add something - it adds snark. And these snarky little sentences are crammed into every paragraph possible. It was completely off-putting in terms of tone and character likability, and killed what could have been an interesting book.