Ripe

I can tell this is putting me in a reading slump so its a DNF 13% in. There's other issues I have with this but ultimately i can't get over the colons. There are colons in sentences that would be perfectly fine without a colon. It wasn't bad at first but then it started to annoy me. And then it made me resentful, for some reason. If you search up where colons are in the book, there's one on about every page. Sometimes, more than once. There was a point where it was every other sentence. I'm sure it's not something that bothers others but once I noticed it, I couldn't stop noticing. So I guess my constructive criticism is to consider punctuation variety next time. My other main criticism is that there were too many lists (usually after a colon! how funny). I didn't feel grounded in plot or physical details because they always came in the form of a list.

I appreciate what it's trying to do. I'm sure it has a great message and I'm sure it will be very popular. I just can't get over these things quite yet.