The Glass Sentence

DNF - PG 47

Why?

I feel like I'm being info-dumped - and skipping ahead indicated that this wouldn't improve for me. I feel like there is too much telling in the story. (I'm not going to say ‘show, don't tell' because I don't entirely understand that, but there is so much stuff that is just told the reader that...it's not working for me.)

Oh, and I'm bored.

I love the idea but what I read left me underwhelmed and cold. And, to be honest with you, waiting for the other shoe to drop because there's just something about this writing style that makes it feel like things are going to get really bad, really soon. (And it reminds me a little of the writing for The Hunchback Assignments. A death knell if I've ever heard one.)

I can best sum it up to you with ‘boredom and unease'.