The Marshall's Second Chance

I did not finish the book. I found something outputting with the author's writing style. It was almost as if she was afraid of dialog. Here's a snippet from pretty early in the story:

Mariner said he would quite like to see the place if Earle didn't mind if he tagged along.

“I could ask them why they are moving and get a few pointers about the trouble in the area.” Earle said it was fine by him.

“The Camerons had the place before them. You remember them, Mars?” The Marshall nodded and asked what happened to them.